Self Evaluation: just like last time choose a partner to work with to review your essay draft. Then answer the questions thoroughly.
Answer each question fully (incorporating both your self-evaluation and your reader’s evaluation) into your answers.Cut and paste each question below into your assignment and then type your answers below each one. Following the questions in each section is a link to assist you with that area of the essay. Some of the documents are long. Scan and then choose what you need to review for this assignment and for future reference. The documents are for you to use and review as needed.
Do you have a thesis that is clear, arguable and direct? Is the thesis statement the last sentence of your first paragraph? Does your reader (tutor, instructor, friend, classmate), know exactly what you intend to argue in the paper simply by reading your thesis statement? Is the reader in any way confused and if so; how will you clarify the thesis so it is not confusing? (See thesis (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. (链接到外部网站。)链接到外部网站。 document).
Do the first sentences in each of your body paragraphs act as topic sentences that make a claim? Is the claim direct and clear? Is it a statement that tells the reader what the paragraph will be about? Are there any topic sentences that need improvement? Explain. (See topic sentence (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. (链接到外部网站。)链接到外部网站。 document ONLY THE FIRST TWO PAGES).
Does every body paragraphs have enough effective and reliable evidence to prove the claim of the topic sentence? Are there facts, personal experiences, observations, statistics and quotes from authorities that prove the claim of each topic sentence? Do you provide evidence that is logical and effective? Have you explained what the evidence means and how it proves your point? Are you teaching the reader something new? Are you engaging the reader or keeping the reader interested and thinking? If so how? If not, what can you add to engage or interest the reader? (See essay diagram and pay attention to the body paragraphs (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. (链接到外部网站。)链接到外部网站。 section).
Do you have an effective, useful and engaging introduction that leads the reader into the subject matter and thesis? If so how does the introduction do this? If it does not, what do you intend to revise to improve your introduction? (See introduction (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. (链接到外部网站。)链接到外部网站。 document).
Do you have a conclusion that intrigues the reader and leaves the reading thinking? Explain. (See conclusion (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. (链接到外部网站。)链接到外部网站。 document.
Have you deliberately set up the essay to feel unified, organized and well connected? Do all parts of the essay connect and build upon each other? Are ideas set up in a logical, working order that is easy to follow? If so, explain your organizational pattern. If not, how will you organize the essay to be more effective? ( See Unity and Coherence (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. (链接到外部网站。)链接到外部网站。 document; first 2 pages then examples as needed.).
Then follow the directions below:
- Review your first draft of essay one and complete the exercise suggested in the document: ” Tips for using transitions”. Read through your first draft essay and then summarize each paragraph from your essay. Essentially, you will briefly state what each paragraph in your first draft is about. Use as few words as possible to describe each paragraph.Write theses few words next to each paragraph in the margin of your essay.
- Once you have completed the notes for all paragraphs, take the notes from the margins and plug them into a list;make sure the list is in order representing your paragraphs first, second, third… to last paragraph. If you have a total of 8 paragraphs then your list should have 8 phrases or sentences.
- Study the list. This list represents the general outline of your first draft. Looking closely at the list you will notice if the order of points makes sense, if it seems, repetative, out of order or is missing something. If you notice anything you’d like to explore, revise or change make a note or stop and change it before moving on.
- After examining the list, explain why you have set up the paragraphs( ideas) in this order. How does the order you have chosen make sense and help the reader follow your argument? Are you using a chronological order or some other type of pattern to create a logical flow? Have you used any transitional phrases? If you notice that the list does not look like it fits together well, revise the list so it is more unified then go back and revise the essay by shifting paragraphs or ideas to create more connection and unity. Each paragraph in your essay should build upon the previous paragraph while also preparing for the next paragraph.
- WHAT TO SUBMIT: Once you complete steps 1-5, submit your finalized list and include a paragraph explaining the reason you chose to put your essay in the order you did.